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Old 08-06-2012, 09:09 AM   #26 (permalink)
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I'm a lyricist too, but I wouldn't post a video of myself rapping into a webcam. That's just asking for hate.

To critique your actual lyricism, you aren't bad at all. Multi-syllable rhymes and decent metaphors. Try to add more word-play if you are inspired by Em.

The one thing I dislike about your rhymes is your cadence. You do go with the beat, but it sounds like you have no heart. You have a sleepy style and it just doesn't work.

Put some more intensity behind your rapping. The lyrics just don't match up with the cadence.

Well, that's my honest two cents.
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