Chair lift shot. Unloading shot. Strapping in shot. You're well on your way to pro level edits. You were just missing the lift line shot.
Seriously. It was a decent first effort.
Thanks man, I appreciate it. And in terms of the copy rights to music, youtube has not always been like this. Its not a really big issue, my video is still available i just wish there was an easier way to have some good music to accompany a video..