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English grammar, Help me with a season greetings and thank you note.

Hello first I will explain a little so you all know what this is about. I have been delivering newspaper every morning for the past 4 years and every year on Christmas time my wife and I send out holiday cards with our return address on it and about half of the people we delivery it to send us back they best wishes with a gift of some kind, most cash. A very few of those people sends out a great tip. This year I want to take the time and say thank you for those people with a hand written message with better cards than the ones I send to the majority.

My English is not very good, I depend too much on google and auto correct to correct my misspelling and I don't want to send something wrong. So if anyone can check if this is ok, or add anything to it to make it look nicer I appreciate very much. So far what I came up with is this:

Wishing you
every happiness
this Holiday Season
and throughout
the coming year!

Another year has passed
and I want to
take the time to say
thank you
for your great generosity
last year.

To you, family and friends,
Happy Holidays!

From your newspaper carrier,
MadeInBrazil =*


So how is that, please anyone with a better english than me, fell free to correct any mistakes.

Thank you.

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Troll huh? If u can't help I understand, just let others do it then.
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I think it sounds great. I don't think I would change anything in particular.
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Wishing you
every happiness
this Holiday Season
and throughout
the coming year!

Another year has past
and I want to
take the time to say
thank you
for your great generosity.

Happy Holidays to my family and friends!

From your newspaper carrier,
MadeInBrazil =*
I made a couple changes but I'm not sure about the Happy Holiday line...are you saying it to family and friends or to the person as well as their family and friends. Also, I personally would replace "has past" with "is gone" but that is personal preference.
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None of it is bad and I would leave it as is for the reason that if they know you it probably comes across as from you and not canned. Making it more genuine. Do people still leave xmas tips? We haven't had people actually delivery papers in years.
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I think it sounds great. I don't think I would change anything in particular.
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I made a couple changes but I'm not sure about the Happy Holiday line...are you saying it to family and friends or to the person as well as their family and friends. Also, I personally would replace "has past" with "is gone" but that is personal preference.
thank you guys, i'm trying to say happy holidays to them, like the person Im sending it to and their family and friends.

someone corrected me on past to passed.
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None of it is bad and I would leave it as is for the reason that if they know you it probably comes across as from you and not canned. Making it more genuine. Do people still leave xmas tips? We haven't had people actually delivery papers in years.
now I know why my garbage man leaves a christmas card every year on my trash can, he wants money. I am cynical though, no one really wants to wish me hapy holidays, they just want my money, bah humbug
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None of it is bad and I would leave it as is for the reason that if they know you it probably comes across as from you and not canned. Making it more genuine. Do people still leave xmas tips? We haven't had people actually delivery papers in years.
yeah I know, I work as a sub-contractor for a distributor center, and we get about 7 different types of paper to make it worth delivering it, our most count it's the new york times and wall street journal, but even that every year less and less people are subscribing to it, with all the digital news now days this eventually going to die, it's getting to the point where it's almost not worth it anymore, all the expenses it's on us, like gas, car and today we just got a letter that we going to have to pay for bags too. So I really count on those tips to make it worth it.
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now I know why my garbage man leaves a christmas card every year on my trash can, he wants money. I am cynical though, no one really wants to wish me hapy holidays, they just want my money, bah humbug
I cant argue with that, that's true we all want something. I dont force no one in giving anything, those who do is the ones that appreciate we waking up every day at 2:30 in the morning in all kind of conditions, as rain, snow, holidays and all to get they paper to them 7 days a week. So at the end of a year, I do expect something and I take better care of those who takes care of me.
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