Pretty nice video. I agree that there might have been a little too much slo mo. Also, I would drop any of the drug useage stuff. Not so much that I disagree, but for the people pictured, that stuff can come back to haunt them. 10 years, 20 years, 30 years later. Better to just keep it under the covers. Plenty of partying you can show with the socially exceptable drugs aka alcohol. You'll notice that even the most rowdy filmers, such as TGR refrain from putting that stuff in their films. They do that for pretty much the reasons listed above.
Sounds like it was an early outing for you. I am sure you'll get it more dialed as you go along. Looking forward to seeing more stuff from you.